Ludivina Seecharran
Monday, July 18, 2011
How can I make this part of my book flow better?
Honestly, I can barely understand what was wrong. The only thing that seems a bit wrong is that they spill wine. I don't really get why you put that in there. But other than that it was pretty good, and I liked your ending. Hope this helps!
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